Nun of that

thanks for the comments. J

It's like a stream of consciousness.

Like Marc said - there are some elements of funny in there but there's a lot of stuff that could be cut out too, it's a bit boring to read as it is but maybe with some polishing and cutting it could be good

Thanks for the comments, I hear what you are both saying, but when I read it I don't know what to cut without screwing it up completely.
If you have time Take a section and and rip it to pieces for me.

Cheers
J

I'm not sure I can be arsed right now Johnny26 but if you cut by half yourself I'd be happy to come back to it. Just go through it and cut out as many words as you can while still keeping the actual jokes