First timer would appreciate critique please Page 2

Quote: NateSean @ 27th August 2014, 7:32 AM BST

Sometimes you just have to baptize yourself in fire and see what burns.

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Ok, now what?

Well now you make sure you killed the spider.

Stand-up is indeed (almost) ALL in the telling.

The Mikey version is the lean, mean, nuts-and-bolts of the set and it's the version that a wise comedian would commit to memory.

The original version, however, is how it might actually be delivered once the comedian is on stage and doing it live in front of an audience.

Some comedians keep it tight while others ramble.

Either way can work, but Mikey's version is the way to go until you're sure the audience loves the sound of your voice.

I like Mikey's version, much slicker. I don't like the reference about the blind though as I don't think we should joke about that

So Handimar, did you do your set yet? How did it go?

Nogget?

What the FUCK? Are you insane? You use a real picture of the Thich Quang Duc monk to punctuate a joke. That's a man burning to death.

What is your other prop comedy involve:

Jews in a concentration camp?
Maybe a journalist beheading?