I made a video I hope you enjoy

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hu5MUyP4V7Q

Brilliant. Loved the cut to Proust!

Very odd, I liked it

"It's off. It's off. It's off"

inspired.

That's brilliant very funny, very tight

Quote: sootyj @ 17th August 2014, 12:47 PM BST

That's brilliant very funny, very tight

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I regret I found it dreadfully slow..

Might be funny if you edited it down to 1 minute long.

Thanks for the feedback. Yes I agree it could be a bit shorter. Though it's one of the first things I've ever done. Anyways thanks again

I think the length is part of its charm for me. And serves the conceit well.

Quote: shane clifford @ 17th August 2014, 5:00 PM BST

Thanks for the feedback. Yes I agree it could be a bit shorter. Though it's one of the first things I've ever done. Anyways thanks again

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A little shorter wouldn't hurt, but you need the strange rhythms and pauses to make it funny - a 1 minute edit would kill it, I'd say.

I guess a punchline might lift it, because the peak of the comedy is the Proust bit, but I quite like the power switch.

Yep, really liked that too. Lots of different bits going on here. Awkward character lols, occasional surreal flourishes and the deliberate mispronounciation and broken rhythm are really well performed and edited.