Hello everybody,
Please come visit my first filmed sketch. We worked hard on it and would appreciate it if you like minded people could have a watch.
It's based in an office and features work colleagues 'gossiping' in that tedious way they do.
Thank you all.
Lewis 
Sorry lewis you position it as tedious. Didn't excite me to watch it and I didn't get through it all. Did you work hard on the script?
Give this a read, it all applies: http://nofilmschool.com/2012/03/process-finding-people-funny-internet/
All the whispering and mumbling meant I couldn't judge as I couldn't hear what was going on.
I thought the acting was pretty decent, but the script was lacking any jokes. I got about two minutes in and then bailed out. I think there's some mileage in a short film about work gossip, but perhaps you need more of a journey going on? And some laughs if you're going the comedy route.