Clairity on Charity

We see a woman standing in a kitchen holding the Yellow Pages.

There is water leaking all over the floor

The woman grabs her mobile and dials a number.

The woman is standing at the window of the living room

The TV behind her is showing Children in Need

We see a van with J Wayne Plumbing on the side arrive

A tall man wearing a Stetson an eye patch, a leather waistcoat and chaps enters the living room and speaks in an American accent

MAN
Howdy ma'am I heard you've had a whole passle of trouble, now if a fella was perhaps offered a coffee and a slice of some homemade pie, could be that that fella may feel obliged to straighten out your mess.

WOMAN
Look normally I adore people who throw themselves into charity with such gusto, but my kitchen is flooded and I really need you to get cracking.

MAN
I have no idea what you mean by the way of charity ma'am?

WOMAN
You mean you're not doing all this for the 'Children In Need'?

MAN
Ain't got any type of family to talk about ma'am, got a brother I haven't seen for ten years, lives out in Utah but he aint got no nippers. Far as charity goes your talking to the wrong fella, my call out fee alone is £345

WOMAN
Oh my God you really are a cowboy

The man touches the rim of his hat with pride as he replies

MAN
Yup

I don't know how I didn't see that coming. It must be cleverly written. Funny.

Thanks for that Stonked

Agree with Stonked the CIN was just enough distraction to hide the twist.

Ta Lah

The problem for me is that you don't hear of plumbers doing work for charity or for children in need

So the initial premise doesn't really work.

It's Children in Need day and people you never expect too jump out and do things, it is also the ideal cover for transvestites to get into their kit without undue suspicion being aroused.
During this national day of wackiness I am sure at least one plumber will do his bit.

Yep really liked it. cracked me up!

Thanks

For me, you're the best writer on these boards.

Thanks for the vote of confidence Beaky, now if I could just interact with people who knows?

You could start by supporting another football team.

Sorry Beaky Old Sport but being an Evertonian is in my DNA.

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ 15th November 2013, 3:34 PM GMT

The problem for me is that you don't hear of plumbers doing work for charity or for children in need

So the initial premise doesn't really work.

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I can see a plum,ber dressing up for CIN, but I'm afraid I didn;t get much out of it all the same...

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ 15th November 2013, 3:34 PM GMT

The problem for me is that you don't hear of plumbers doing work for charity or for children in need

So the initial premise doesn't really work.

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Yeah, the whole scenario is a little unrealistic. Not that there's anything wrong with a sketch being unrealistic. God knows, plenty are. However, there needs to be some type of logic in the universe you create. Here it seems a bit forced. Also, there's only one gag which I think you need to then subvert somehow to get anything out of it.