Would anybody be willing to judge my writing?

hello sally

Yep but I usually only review stuff in critique.

Crikey. Way too shy for that. Anyone who trust me not to mishandle their email address I'd be super grateful.

Sorry for being awkward!

Come now would we have Christianity if Jesus had said,

"come on Peter I'm not standing on that mount, I'll just have quick run through with the disciples."

Yes, but now I've built it up so the stakes are even higher.

Hmm

Just realised I can direct message people though this forum.

Hi Lee not bad but it feels a bit drawn out you're using too many words, explaining too much and telegraphing the punchline

Also the statue of liberty is a bit too much of a leap

If you want criticism, you're in the right place