NJ: Modern Robbery

So I sent this in for last weeks Newsjack (Ep2) and didn't get anywhere. They did do a 'Bank robber goes to bank after working from home' bit though so I guess I was at least spot on topically.

Still, unused, unloved, might as well hang out here:

Justin:After last weeks arrest of eight men over an electronic bank heist, it's been revealed more banks are now being robbed by compute. But some gangs, like any workforce are taking a while to adjust to the change...

Boss:Right, 'eres the plane. Mr Blue will take the entry, Pink you're getaway, I'll do the gruff voice stuff.
Gruffer Voice:But boss!
Boss:No arguing, we get in get out no fuss! Let's GO GO GO!
Blue:Gaining entry boss!
FX:TYPING ON COMPUTER
FXING
Siri Computer voice:Hello. You appear to be robbing a bank, would you like help with that?
Pinkh, yes click OK!
FX:MOUSE CLICK
Blue:We're in boss!
Boss:RIGHT, EVERYONE DOWN ON THE GROUND, AND NO-ONE GETS HURT
FXHOTGUN COCKED
Blue:Er, no need for that boss.
Boss:But I always does the shouting. It's tradition!
Blue:Yeah, but there's no one here. I just type the numbers here
FX:TYPING
Blue:and it goes to bank account in Spain don't it.
FXING
Blueee, it's transferring now!
FXHOTGUN COCKED
Boss:Call the fuzz and I'll blow yer head right orf.
Pink:You're threatening a laptop boss.
Blue:We got a million already boss!
Boss:A Million?
FX:GUNSHOT
Pink:boss!
Blue:You've shot the laptop!
Boss:Well, it's tradition! I always accidentally shoot someone.
Pink:Can you control - alt delete it?
Boss:What about a virus scan?
Blue:It's dead boss
Bossamit, knew I should have got the extended warranty
FXING OF PHONE
Blue:Never mind, monies just come through! It's all in the cloud now boss
Boss:Get in!
FX:GUN SHOTS
Blue:My phone!
Boss:Let's move! Pink - let's roll!
FX:CAR DOOR SLAMS, ENGINE ROARS THEN ALMOST IMMEDIATE SQUEAL OF BREAKS
Pink:Here we are, Hotel de Magaluf!
Blue:You know we could have checked in first boss?
Boss:It's tradition!
FXIRENS
Blue:What the? I went in clean boss I swear!
Pinkomeone must have blabbed?
BossBEAT) Well you have to post your swag on facebook don't yer? It's the new tradition!
END

It is I know a bit on the longer side; but it'd also be pretty fast paced... Thoughts and pointers happily received.

There is a lot to like there.

'Hello. You appear to be robbing a bank, would you like help with that?'

and

'knew I should have got the extended warranty'

are definite cues to laughter.

It kind of spirals away from you at the end. The getaway gag did not quite come off, and I did not quite get the facebook thing (but then I do not quite get facebook).