Hey Everyone,
I always get so much great feedback here and would love to get some on my new film "Campus Security"! All feedback (good and bad) welcome!!
Thanks so much!
New improvised mock-doc film! Feedback!
Good inprovised stuff.Maybe funnier if a bit or a lot more extreme.Nerdier looking and sounding maybe.Good luck.
I didn't find it that funny, but I thought it could so easily have been a bit of a hoot. I felt there were loads of missed opportunities for making it funny, simply by actively mocking the guards and revealing their total incompetence. You've got all the set ups in place - but you just haven't made use of them. For example, in the scene about the trees being planted to break the fall of any student who jumped out of a window, it was crying out for a visual gag of some kind - perhaps a partly dressed dummy hanging upside down from a branch and going totally unnoticed by the security guard.
I don't think the inclusion of props would have called for any great subtlety - in fact, the more overtly placed, the better. In the scene by the bins, for instance, any number of suspicious objects could have been tossed in or fallen out.
I think you needed to be bolder - it was too under-stated.
I thought it was very good indeed, nice example of character and unreliable narrator humour.
Maybe it's a little to self indulgent and slow. But on the other hand its slowburn.
I liked the wrestler reveal.
Hey guys, this is all SO great. Thank you so much!