INT: INSIDE A TIN OF SARDINES
SARDINE1
Get out of my face.
SARDINE2
You get out of MY face.
SARDINE3
Shut up the two of you. We haven't got faces.
SARDINE1
And that's supposed to make everything alright, is it?
End
Sardines
Nice
Really love the absurd start but needs a better last line.
The key to this sketch is on the side of tin.
Nice and strange, worked for me.
Very nice.
Made me smile. I'd lose the last line.
Good point.
The last line's there to beef up the pathos.
It does work (I am so indecisive), its ultimately ridiculous, you know how can you argue with out a head?
I love the sketch - I just (personally) find the last line a little distracting from the tone.
I (in what is probably a more obvious direction) might go with this for a last line -
SARDINE 1
'Ooo' look, a talking fish...
As I said I really like it anyway.
regards
playfull
Sardines can be quite belligerent when pressed. I was trying to evoke that ethos while at the same time arousing sympathy for their plight.
Quote: stonked @ August 8 2013, 1:22 PM BSTSardines can be quite belligerent when pressed. I was trying to evoke that ethos while at the same time arousing sympathy for their plight.
There's nothing worse than a belligerent sardine in my opinion, give me a placid pilchard every time...
Sketch is great as it is.
It definitely needs that last line.
If they make another The Young Ones series - that would fit right in.
INT: INSIDE A TIN OF SARDINES
SARDINE1
Get out of my face.
SARDINE2
You get out of MY face.
SARDINE1
Anything else I do that annoys you?
SARDINE2
Well yes, to be honest. You smell of fish!