Quote: enigmatic @ August 10 2013, 12:33 AM BST
It's more of a sitcom scene than a sketch: the dialogue is actually pretty good for the most part but it's relying on jokes and unfolding drama to move it along rather than a core quirky angle.
As a dialogue-driven sitcom scene its pretty decent actually, given some suitably hammy actors, an enthusiastic audience and preferably set in a perfectly regular bar without any references to Mars (throw away the GSOH line in particular). Could probably do with a snappy line earlier than the coaster joke, but at least the coaster line is funny.
thank you so much Enigmatic, I've looked at the last few post you have made and mostly agree with your comments so I will take on board what you have said.
I guess I wanted to make a sketch show sit com in a way as im tried of watching program's such as little Britain and Catherine tate where every week the jokes are the same, I thought if it was based in a bar, you could have some funny jokes told every week by the same people without having to be the same joke! I hope I'm not the only one who watched little Britain and laughed his head off to the saying "I want that one" or "Yer but no but" however after two or three weeks I got bored of the same joke! this way, every week the same people could have another set of funny lines!
Quote: sootyj @ August 10 2013, 12:50 AM BST
That is true the dialogue flows well and the few jokes are all pretty good
Wow Sootyj that is very nice of you to say, you are one of the gods on here as far as I am concerned and some of your work has had my in hysterics (not all of it lol!) but thank you,
Quote: Jennie @ August 9 2013, 7:07 PM BST
Then I apologise. I thought it wasn't really in keeping with other things you have posted. It is difficult to detect sarcasm on the Internet
I've not really understood sarcasm since 1984! lol
No need to apoligise for me not being clear!