Aaron
Saturday 20th July 2013 4:54pm
Royal Berkshire
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Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
1.It was also a grenade attack as three of them died. Four others were wounded. And in a same day, another soldier was killed when his convoy on the western highway from Baghdad came under small fire and a rocket propelled grenade attack.
"It was also a grenade attack..." does not quite make sense outside of the context, presumably set up by earlier sentences? If this is all there is, the first sentence should read something more like: "There was a grenade attack in which three people died."
"And in a same day" should be "On the same day". 'The', not 'a', because you are referring to a specific day.
Also, I think "small fire" should be "small arms fire".
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
2.A same routine is defined as experiencing the exact actions from shot one to shot two
Again, this doesn't really make sense. Perhaps in the context it is extracted from, it would be a bit clearer what you are trying to say.
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
3.Eligible parents can share the number of weeks of parental benefits payable under the EI program and the parental or adoption benefits payable under the Quebec Parental Insurance Plan for a same birth or adoption of a child
Programme, not program.
"for a same birth" should probably be "for the birth".
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
1.Very different diseases are lumped together under a same name because they merely share the same clinical expression
Again, "the" not "a" (same name), as you are referring to a specific thing, not a generic.
"Expression" should probably be "symptoms"?
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
2.All objects issued from a same class do not have the same state at a same moment; they share only the same behavior.
Again, really not sure what this is supposed to be saying, it doesn't quite make sense as a single sentence out of context.
However, I would guess "from a same class" should be "from a single class", and "at a same moment" should be "at the same moment". Reasons as above.
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
3. If every European would have the same wage and be taxed the same percentage with a same commitment to actually pay them, then we would talk about some equality
"European would have the same" should be "European had the same".
Not sure what the 'same commitment to actually pay them' stuff is about. Seems to imply people are being promised wages and not actually ever paid? Either way, again, "percentage with the same" is correct.
"we would talk about some equality" would probably be better as "we would see equality".
Quote: olena907 @ July 20 2013, 3:01 PM BST
4.Yesterday me and my friend both using the same network 3G service from a same service provider played live stream (live cricket match on our phones.
This can be simplified a lot: "Yesterday me and my friend, both using the same 3G network, streamed a live cricket match on our phones."
