Private Detective (TSWYW - Thriller)

DETECTIVE:
So ma'am...

WOMAN:
Missy!

DETECTIVE:
How can I be of assistance?

WOMAN:
Well, you see it's my husband. (SOBBING) I think he's... commandeering the cockpits of other women!

DETECTIVE:
Okay. And you want me...

WOMAN:
To stalk him on my behalf!

DETECTIVE:
Ah.

WOMAN:
(SNIFFS) Is that a problem?

DETECTIVE:
Well you see; stalking doesn't really fall within my remit... missy.

WOMAN:
But you're a private detective!

DETECTIVE:
Yes, but private detectives don't STALK people!

WOMAN:
Then what DO you do?

DETECTIVE:
Oh, lots of things. We follow people; take photographs of them; tap their phones...

WOMAN:
But that's the very definition of stalking!

DETECTIVE:
Oh yeah? Well let's see what the DICTIONARY has to say about that, shall we?

FX: DICTIONARY PLONKED DOWN ON DESK

(CONT'D)
Where are we... stab... stale... ah, stalk! (BEAT) Oh my God... I'm a creep!

END

That's a really good idea and I like the economy of the language.

The punchline seems a little rushed, also the cockpit line threw me a bit.

I thought the funny was going to go another way. But the idea of a PI finding out he's a stalker is genius.

Maybe try a famous detective like Magnum or Sherlock Holmes

I agree with the above and love the idea of making it Sherlock.

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