In the style of a rant.
Got some good laughs so can't moan really!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XLGtxdzqtzM
Cheers
(PS excuse the poor quality.. a better video is on its way to me)
My stand up from Tuesday!
Hi George,
I found the content funny but your delivery was far to sweary and aggressive (shouty) for my taste.
I agree - your content is good and you are a competent and engaging performer.
But I thought there was just a little bit too much swearing - I don't think one sentence went by without the use of the word f**k. Used properly, swearing can be very funny and very effective, but it was diluted here due to overuse.
If you tone down the swearing, I think you will come across much better - more "energised" than "aggressive".
But for a first try, I thought it was really good.
Cheers for the feedback!
As it was a rant.. the swearing and aggression was sort of the point.
I personally don't think it would have been as funny without the agression
George I have no problem with swearing or aggressive presentation, I actually like it, but it has to be done really well.
So if I was to offer a criticism it would be that you stayed on the bird shit thing to long and should have flipped at something else after three of four hits on the same target otherwise it turns into a rant instead of a routine.
That's mate. I know what you mean.
It was my first set so I was trying to pad it out a bit
It was sound for the first three hits, but once you had them chuckling at the notion of you being a flipper you should have switched to another issue and gauged their response to see if they wanted more in that vein.
I don't do stand up at all so it's easy for me to talk but I understand the genre very well and enjoy meticulous sets that come across as though they are haphazard rantings.
You need to expand your anger, may I suggest laying into the Welsh? it's not racist but its edgy and them c**ts need laying into anyway!
lol thanks for the input,
I am aiming to do about 4 or 5 different subjects in 1 5 min set.
but at the time I only had 2 subjects I knew would get laughs so as I gain experience ill find adding new bits in easier I suppose!
As for the welsh - they are on my hit list
So they should be, gang of c**ts the lot of them.
The poor bloody English have to pay billions to help them speak Welsh and they only use it if an English person comes into one of their f**king shops!
Every 999 call made in Wales is recorded, if you played them back how many emergency pleas do you think will be in that f**king duck noise they use?
I'll tell you f**king none!
It would be "Send us us an ambulance boyo I've got my John Thomaaaaaaaas stuck in a sheep"
Or "Send the fire brigade isn't it, I was burning an Englishman's bungalow when my f**king red hair caught fire now wasn't it!"
or
"Send us the coppers round love my sister Gwynedd has gone berserk on the cider and is running round half naaaaaaked making us the talk of the valleys"
F**k the lot of them, they need their own Scrabble as well, decent English Scrabble only has six letters L's in the bag and they need twelve just to spell f**king Cat!
So don't get me f**king started on them c**ts
LOOOOOOOOOOOOL brilliant!
If you like it use it lad, it's not like I'm planning starting to do stand up, besides I'd love to see it performed
really! class. Ill use some of it defo.
I'll do it just for you! 
Good lad