I had an idea for a comedy, have written most of it and would appreciate any feedback.
Norman Hobbs chance encounter with a stag party hypnotist sets him on a road trip to find the only woman he ever loved-Kerry Moon. Little does he know that he is still under a hypnotic suggestion or that he is being pursued by a pair of villains hired by his ex wife to bring him back home.
Organ harvesters, geriatric hit-women, man-dogs and Norman Hobbs will collide. The race is on to Kerry Moon. 
Sounds marvellous,Otty. Are we going to have the opportunity to read any of it?
I might put a scene on here but don't really have that much confidence in my writing ability. When I started creating the story I did so with the intention of trying to please others but really struggled. As soon as I started writing to please myself the story just seemed to come along much easier. The opening scene is a conversation in a womb and then I just let my mind go from there. There is a mixture of good and bad characters in the story but through a series of flashbacks I hope to give even the nastiest of them some humanity. I imagined certain actors/comedians in the roles(you reading this Greg Davies?) and found this also helped. The humour in the story is often very dark and awkward but hopefully there are still people out there who go for this sort of stuff. If not at least I got some enjoyment out of the creative? process.
I think the story works as a whole but it would be nice to get some feedback or help finishing it off.So I might just post some after all.
Thanks for the comment Beaky I'm glad I happened across this site.
I might put a scene on here but don't really have that much confidence in my writing ability. When I started creating the story I did so with the intention of trying to please others but really struggled. As soon as I started writing to please myself the story just seemed to come along much easier. The opening scene is a conversation in a womb and then I just let my mind go from there. There is a mixture of good and bad characters in the story but through a series of flashbacks I hope to give even the nastiest of them some humanity. I imagined certain actors/comedians in the roles(you reading this Greg Davies?) and found this also helped. The humour in the story is often very dark and awkward but hopefully there are still people out there who go for this sort of stuff. If not at least I got some enjoyment out of the creative? process.
I think the story works as a whole but it would be nice to get some feedback or help finishing it off.So I might just post some after all.
Thanks for the comment Beaky I'm glad I happened across this site.
Put a scene up! You'll never know unless you try. Any criticism is of the work - not you as a person or as a writer. Feedback only helps us get better. Good luck
The opening scene is a conversation in a womb
Put this scene up.