Through the Rabbit Hole! Page 2
It feels a little like "Charlie the Unicorn", with the craziness set against the 'uncaring' character. Which is good. Like Steve said, get crazier the more you get into it, maybe.
I'd like to see Mr Tops offer the guy a pill that will shrink them down, like Alice, so they can navigate the hole to a hidden world. Unsure, he agrees after a bit of pushing. Struggling to get pill from Mr Top's pocket as they're wedged, they end up having to pass the pill from mouth to mouth, which he's definitely not happy about. Then he wakes up with his trousers round his ankles and his dog sniffing his ass...
Or something less gay...
Quote: Nil Putters @ May 31 2013, 12:25 AM BSTOr something less gay...
Write what you know Nil, write what you know 
But I'll deffo look into more "angles" for him.
Take the magic out, make him even more flamboyant and let the dog walker naively suspect he's magical so he happily gets in the hole, which is more like a cave.
Once in the cave he gradually discovers during an impromptu tea party consisting of cans of Tizer and Greggs pasties that he is in fact dining with an escaped psychopath who is also wanted for the slaying of the owner of a fancy dress shop.
I like Teddy's ending.
The tea party guests are skeletons in French Maid and Penguin outfits.
'DRINK SOME TIZER! DRINK IT!'
The dog breaks free and runs for help.
'What's that shep? A murderous loon is stealing Tizer and pasties and force feeding a penguin?'
Police turn up. Tops arrested. Fancy dress shop has a really good sale then closes.
Too far?
It's got a sprightly feel to the dialogue, but there doesn't seem to be any real focus to the sketch. It's got a surreal vibe to it which I like, but I don't really know what it's about.
This is a great idea. It has a lovely tone and is wonderfully surreal. I also love the visual of the two pairs of legs sticking out of the rabbit hole but I'm not too sure about the ending.