Argh! Don't say that Roscoff! The tea lady has now disappeared. Ellie's story has taken a slightly different route, as I wanted her to be more proactive and less reactive.
But thank you for reading. 
I am determined that my thread shall never die.
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Go with your gut, you know what works for you.
I mean 6 million a people a week like watching a man in an dress, tell 30 year old jokes in an Irish accent.
An obnoxious rat puppet, saved TV AM.
but if you're finding your feet and building, stronger oomphier characters I think that feels more you.
I love Beryl. I could write tea and murder jokes all day long. But I want there to be an element of truth in this. I want to be able to say - this COULD be happening in the Crown Court in your town. Sadly, Beryl did not fit in with that vision.
I am big believer in dumping material.
Quote: Jennie @ September 9 2013, 10:33 PM BSTArgh! Don't say that Roscoff! The tea lady has now disappeared. Ellie's story has taken a slightly different route, as I wanted her to be more proactive and less reactive.
But thank you for reading.
I am determined that my thread shall never die.
Nope. You can tell everything about her by the interaction with the Tea Lady. It's like the janitor and JD in Scrubs. I'd think again or possibly I'll borrow her and take her out for a drink one night
Quote: Jennie @ September 9 2013, 10:41 PM BSTI love Beryl. I could write tea and murder jokes all day long. But I want there to be an element of truth in this. I want to be able to say - this COULD be happening in the Crown Court in your town. Sadly, Beryl did not fit in with that vision.
I am big believer in dumping material.
Why? Look at Green Wing. Off the planet as far as realism was concerned but bloody funny.
What can you tell about her though? The tea lady is evil. She is scared. I cut it because I thought you learnt very little about my main character from that exchange.
Who are you taking out? My tea lady? You better not start seeing my characters behind my back. 
The janitor is a very interesting example, he exists purely to taunt dr Dorien and is a monster. That could work, but he's a funny original character in his own right. And he taunts Dorien very much as a subplot.
But Beryl is a monster who's stuck in the A plot.
So she could work outside the A plot? Interesting.
Yes and pop into it occaisonally in the A plot she's a distraction, but in the B plot. Maybe hiding a horses head in the tea urn and corpses in the sandwich fridge, she could be quite endearing
Quote: Jennie @ September 9 2013, 10:49 PM BSTWhat can you tell about her though? The tea lady is evil. She is scared. I cut it because I thought you learnt very little about my main character from that exchange.
Who are you taking out? My tea lady? You better not start seeing my characters behind my back.
Extract some of the interaction from the fellow barrister and insert with tea lady. She hates the fact that she's not up to scratch, disheveled and unorganised. There's a great dynamic there. The interaction with the barrister was...well not as good! But that's just me 
Quote: Jennie @ September 9 2013, 11:04 PM BSTSo she could work outside the A plot? Interesting.
Maybe the tea lady work she is doing is community service.
Nice one marcp
I certainly liked the idea of Beryl as she is such a contrasting type of Character to the Barristers. Like people have said, she doesn't need to be integral to the Main Plot but could be a great vehicle for a slightly different perspective or style of humour.
That's a nice idea, Marc. It would make her presence more plausible.
Starting to lose confidence in my own decisions. The whole process is stressing me out at the moment. 
A problem is just a way of making a script/story better... it isn't a hurdle it is an opportunity!
Thanks Matt. You're right, it's all a bit middle class without her. Will have a think. Thanks all.
Quote: Marc P @ September 10 2013, 10:05 AM BSTA problem is just a way of making a script/story better... it isn't a hurdle it is an opportunity!