Sitcom. Bound For Clearing.

Hello everyone.
Below is a link to the first 11 pages to my sitcom, Bound For Clearing. Obviously I'm not expecting everyone to read all of it so even if you read just a couple of pages please feel free to comment and let me know what you thought.

The sitcom is about three 18 year olds, Tom, Jeff and Amy, who decide to travel around England for the summer. (Amy doesn't appear in the first half)

Thanks in advance and if you would like me to repay the favour and critique your work then please let me know.

http://samuellees.yolasite.com/resources/Bound%20For%20Clearing.%20Part%201.pdf

This is a link to the whole script.

http://samuellees.yolasite.com/resources/Bound%20For%20Clearing%20complete.pdf

the link doesn't work

Link works for me! Will have a look through it later.

Thanks for letting me know. I blooming hate PDF's!
Try this link, if not I''l give you a ring and read it out loud to you in my morgan freeman voice.

http://www.behance.net/gallery/Bound-for-clearing/7424539

Plot moves forward fast enough and the dialogue is simple but funny in the right places. Favourite line: "then punish him". Idea doesn't exactly scream "long term potential" but it is reasonably original, and I could see it working if the storylines are entertaining enough. I'd need to see a second half to really judge.

There are a few small spelling and punctuation errors ("their" instead of "they're" at one point and some apostrophes that should and shouldn't be there) you'll want to iron out.

One day (perhaps after Newsjack) I'll get around to posting my own stuff on here...

Thanks a lot for reading it. I'm glad you thought the pacing was okay as this was something I was worried about. My spelling and punctuation is terrible. Even when I talk I leave out or add apostrophes all the time.

I know what you mean about its long term potential but I think it's a problem that could bring up some creative solutions.

Thanks again and definitely get around to posting stuff.