Jeff And The Amazing Thingy!!!

MIKE WALKS IN AND SEES JEFF FAWNING OVER SOMETHING WE WON'T SEE.

MIKE: What's that Jeff?

JEFF: It is completed!

HE HOLDS IT UP IN TRIUMPH.

MIKE: What is it?

JEFF: My creation... finally!

MIKE: (taking it from him) You mean this?

MIKE INSPECTS IT, HE TOSSES IT BETWEEN HIS HANDS NONCHALANTLY.

JEFF: Okay Mike, be careful. It's my life's work!

MIKE: This, is your life's work?

JEFF: Why, yes?

MIKE: Really???

JEFF: Yes, I have lost friends and family over it but finally...

MIKE: Mate?

JEFF: What?

MIKE: It's... shit.

JEFF: W-what?

MIKE: What you have here, is a piece of shit. I mean not literally. But it's value is that of shit.

JEFF: But I... my wife left me and my kids, they... they don't talk to me any more because of this.

MIKE: And all those people died...

JEFF: Yes, those poor souls.

MIKE: Died in vein...

JEFF: Alright mate.

THEY BOTH TAKE A MOMENT TO CONSIDER WHAT'S JUST BEEN REALISED.

JEFF: So what now?

MIKE: Ummm, Cuppa tea?

JEFF: There's no milk, I used it on that.

MIKE: Oh Jeff, when will your path a chaos end?

JEFF HANGS HIS HEAD IN SHAME AS MIKE PUTS HIM ARM AROUND HIM IN CONSOLATION AS THEY WALK AWAY.

It's an enjoyable piece, but I found it a little bit too laid back to really succeed. I thoroughly liked the bit where Mike destroys Jeff's dreams by telling him it's shit - maybe therein lies the pathway to success with this one.

Thanks, Ben. I enjoy writing these abstract pieces because it's an exercise and let's me loosen up with dialogue rhythms. It's nice to get some feedback on it too.

It's funny you should say that about Mike because it was going to be a sketch about Mike just shitting on everything Jeff does and he just takes it, no matter how cruel Mike gets. But then I thought I didn't want it to be too long.

Glad you enjoyed it.