Holiday Park Script

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I think it's well written and you establish your characters well - although they might be a little 'cookie-cutter', if you know what I mean.
It does feel more like a comedy/drama than a sitcom, in which case I think you need a stronger story, and you need it to start earlier.
The Chris character is an obvious source of conflict, but I think this would have to start earlier and drive the thing forward a bit more.
The dialogue is all very believable (and often funny), but some of the interchanges go on a bit too long without pushing the narrative any further.

You'd obviously have to put a lot of clear blue water between this and 'Hi-D-Hi', but i"m sure you don't need telling that.

Good luck.

Thank you for taking time to read it - I agree about the comedy/drama and I am hoping to keep it as far away from Hi-De-Hi as possible. I will take your point about Chris on board and look at developing the story earlier on in the script.

Thanks