NJ KI: Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company

Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company

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TINA:Is rough foot skin getting you down? Are the soles of your feet thicker than a Hobbit's fake accent?

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TINA:Then what you need is an ice-cold trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Tourism Company! Rough skin was getting Bob down. Then he took a trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company!

BOB:I used to be embarrassed by my feet. But since I took a trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company, they've fallen clean off. Now I have grown in confidence and gained a Paralympic medal!

JIM:My nose fell off - but I can still smell a bargain!

TINA:Book your trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company today! (High levels of insanity required for all expeditions. To avoid disappointment and boring health and safety lectures, do not consult your GP before applying.)

Great idea but needs better execution. Feet and nose falling off are essentially the same joke. Needs more gags too.

Put some f/x in to use the medium too.

For KI, it'd need the above comments actioned and to be KI's fictionalised version of Fiennes.

Dan

Thank you for the feedback. I hope this is an improvement. Sorry about the formatting - I'm not sure how to change it once I copy and paste it onto the forum.

Ranulph Fiennes Tourism Company

GRAMSoothing Musak

TINA:Is rough foot skin getting you down? Are the soles of your feet thicker than a Hobbit's fake accent?

GRAMSptimistic music

TINA:Then what you need is an ice-cold trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Tourism Company! Rough skin was getting Bob down. Then he took a trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Tourism Company!

F/X:A cheese grater, grating something thick and disgusting.

BOB:I used to be embarrassed by my feet. The fungus was so thick, a cheese grater could barely shift it. My only consolation was the saving I made on Parmesan.

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BOB:But since I took a trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Tourism Company, they've fallen clean off. Now I have grown in confidence and gained a Paralympic medal!

F/X:Whistling wind, seagulls calling, one particularly loudly

FIENNES:Fiennes here, strapped to an angry bird on the edge of Kirrin cliffs. Spiffing fun! Come with me and you're guaranteed freedom from foot fungi and a jolly good wheeze! Chapettes welcome, as long as they go by a fellow's name and never say the word menstrual. Frightful business.

TINA:Book your trip with the Ranulph Fiennes Travel Company Today. Ranulph Fiennes: We'll Sure It'll Be Fine. (Life Insurance essential, wooses and sissies need not apply).

Liked 'thicker than a hobbit's fake accent', prefered the first version but neither really works for me TBH.

I think the punchline needs to be the foot or nose dropping off, if possible with a bit more inbetween (rather than after).

Hope that makes sense.

A lot better, that one. I have concerns about taste now. I did laugh though, so it must be funny.

Dan

I'm glad it was an improvement. Apologies for the lack of taste and decency!