Wheel of fourtune

We see a man parking a bicycle outside a bicycle repair shop.

The man has a terrible limp and looks in pain as he enters the shop.

The man then returns with another man, together the look at the bicycles back wheel.

The bicyclist then moves his arms to indicate that he has gone head first over the handle bars.

He then rolls up his trouser leg and shows the other man a really nasty graze on his knee, the other man squirms at the sight of the injury.

The bicyclist then shows the man grazes on both his elbows and a big dint in his safety helmet,as the other man winces.

The two men then return to looking at the back wheel and nod in agreement as the man wheels the bicycle into the shop.

We then see the bicyclist come out of the shop and riding his bike away happily, the other man is standing in the doorway with his hands on his hips looking satisfied.

We then go back to the bicyclist he is whistling as he rides we then see he has pink stabilisers fitted to his bicycle.

I had to look up "stabilisers". I thought they were the fins on missiles, rockets and bombs. But they're actually "training wheels". Don't you call 'em training wheels in the UK?

No sorry it's stabilisers.

Don't try sell your stuff down under Teddy, it's a different language ya big gallah.

Laughed at the daftness of the sketch

Thanks for that Stephen it's nice to get a comment on a sketch, the critique site seems very quiet these days which is sad. Lets hope members have a go and post some stuff up keep the place lively for others to bounce off.

More good stuff Teddy. I still use my stabilisers and I'm 46, but they all know I'm cool 'cos of the playing cards pegged to my spokes

Like this, Teddy.

Simple and very visual but paints a terrific picture.

A bit like Benny Hill but sadly no scantily clad women.
A rewrite maybe?

Yes, very funny and I think, for this forum...stabilizers is fine (note I used a 'z' there...can't shake it, it's ingrained). I can see the scene and it works very well. You could also have the bike repair guy pointing at something in his shop and the cyclist nodding happily...then going off down the road on a massive tricycle with a shopping basket on the front...or even motoring along on a mobility scooter. Lots of scope here...but, it's funny as it is. Adapting his own bike works very well.

Nicky, you're telling me you haven't got spokey dokeys on your wheels!! Oh dear, what a racket they used to make. Like blakeys on our school shoes, so we tap tap tapped along the school corridor and felt cool (well I did).

I still use Blakes segs on my shoes and I have a tendency to walk around with my hands in my back pockets although I have lost quite a few combs because of the habit.

Thought the punch was weak. Didn't laugh.

Breakfast cereal freebies were so much better back then. I don't even think they do them now! You have to save a ton of tokens PLUS pay the price of the 'gift' AND pay the p&p! That's AFTER having paid the postage to get your payment there in the first place! Snap, Crackle and Pop miniatures...nothing compares.