3 MIDDLE AGED PEOPLE (2 MEN AND A WOMAN) SIT AROUND AN OLD LADY IN A HOSPITAL BED, SHE IS HOOKED UP TO A MACHINE THAT BLEEPS OCCAISONALLY
A DR STANDS BY LOOKING SAD
MIDDLE AGED WOMAN
Oh mum you've been so brave for so long.
BLEEPING STOPS
MIDDLE AGED MAN
Is that it....is she.
DR
Yo mother is
ARTHUR PILCHARD RUNS INTO THE ROOM AND HITS THE DR OVER THE HEAD WITH A BED PAN
ARTHUR PILCHARD
Don't you steal my material you white coated rasta clart!
Haha, like it
DR FOX AND R HILARY JONES ARE SHOWING A TEENAGER B&Q
DR HILARY JONES
It's wonderful that celebrity drs for homeless teenagers has been able to afford to buy you something for your new flat.
DR FOX
Yes and what would you like?
TEENAGER
Dr, Dr I feel like a pair of curtains.
ARTHUR PILCHARD THROWS A HANDGRENADE AT THEM KILLING ALL 3
ARTHUR PILCHARD
My joke you f**k knobs!
Liked the Dr sketch, ending was visually funny and quite unexpected...
I'd tidy up the intro a bit...
Yeh its a bit too functional granted
The trouble with anything else you write after the first sketch is that eveyone will know what's coming and it kind of gets a little boring unless you can improve on the first gag...
You could have Arthur Pilchard berating a pig armed with a flick knife and saying something like 'No, No, It's The Financial Times Crossword that's pink and hard.' If you catch my drift.