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Terrific idea for a sketch but I think it's a little hurried and needs rewriting. This sketch has the potential to be brilliant.

Is it me, or is the punchline the joke i.e. a comment on the ridiculous overreaction to tweeting 'crimes'?
In which case you want to get in and out as soon as possible - rather than stretch it.
Don't really need the bit where they describe the efforts they've been to get the thing up there - which is all a bit expositional anyway - we all know it was a major deal - just get straight into the tweets and into the punch.

Like it.

I like the general idea, but the bolt on ending doesn't really close the sketch for me. There's too much exposition throughout as well. However, the exposition, the punchline and the general structure is very NewsRevue. I've had similar things accepted, so worth sending to them as is.

Followed everyones advice except Badges (sorry)

this is the probable final version

thanks all

(nb one problem with nr is it teaches bad habits they will take some pretty poor stuff and tidy it up, speaking of my own efforts here)

Quote: sootyj @ August 7 2012, 2:17 PM BST

except Badges (sorry)

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Yay! In your face!

*though he did make some very valid points*

True, but well it worked for me