The price of meals can be affected by a variety of aspects, from the weather to political uncertainty. In England, increasing food costs are resulting in a meteoric increase in meat thefts.
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I'm afraid the rather simple, quite neat idea has been bludgeoned to death by being overwritten.
I think you need to go back to basics on this.
Mr Bluth you have been given an honest assessment free of charge, how you use it will determine the fate of this sketch and your overall approach to future sketches.
Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ October 3 2012, 10:11 AM BSTMr Bluth you have been given an honest assessment free of charge, how you use it will determine the fate of this sketch and your overall approach to future sketches.
But he didn't write it Mr. P...
Still good advice, have you got any for posters who jump you gun please?
I write liked both versions; the first lacked enough content, and the second lacked punch. If you address these sorts of things, then I look forward to seeing your future work.