Toilet Talk

It's an old joke so not too sure if it's already been done.

http://www.circalit.com/liamtulley/projects/project_1334267737/?readScreen=true

I hadn't heard this one (but I'm like that!) so It worked for me, the dialogue came across a bit lumbering though and wasn't as smooth a read as it could have been for such a short piece, I didn't quite buy in to the scenario as was. Still laughed at the ending though. (check page 1, spelling of 'hear') Good luck with it.

Thanks for the comments glad it made you laugh at the end, will work on the build up I'm confused about the 'hear' spelling though????

Man says 'hello, can you here me?" should be 'hear'.

Oh right I was reading the wrong part lol

Sorry PurpleRonnie, but I saw that punchline coming a country mile off...

Hi Purpleronnie,

A nice idea but unfortunately it's been done before almost exactly the same as you've written it. I think I've heard 2 comedians do this in the last 5 or so years and it went something like:

I was having a shit in the toilet the other day when this bloke in the cubicle said 'alright mate, how are you doing.' Not wanting to be rude I said 'not bad and you?' He said,'I'm fine what are you up to later?' Now I'm starting to get a bit worried he's after something sexual so I say 'I'm just gonna go home and f**k the missus.' He then replies 'Mate, do you mind I'm trying to have a telephone conversation in here.'

Or something along those lines.