Cofilmic Sketch

Hi, this is my sketch for the Cofilmic competition on Circalit...

http://www.circalit.com/liamtulley/projects/project_1334248261/?readScreen=true

Would be happy for feedback.

Thanks

Hey Liam, I think your work is more the start of a story or more to me like an advert, rather then a sketch. Maybe its not my thing. But keep on doing sketches because there is potential, just try to make it closer to the conventional sketch. If you look at the other Cofilmic sketches you might see where I'm coming from.

Thanks for the advice - maybe this would be better? http://www.circalit.com/liamtulley/projects/project_1334263383/?readScreen=true

Yes, see I thinkthat's way more suited and more funny! Good job.