British Comedy Guide

NJ Reject - Humble

Only just getting round to posting last week's one p1sspoor effort. Hey, some of us have day jobs.

"Humble"
Justin intro:

It's always a good idea to get out when you are ahead - unless you are Lewis Hamilton. This week Kate Humble has announced that she will be stepping down from Springwatch - but is undecided where she will turn her skills to next.

FX Crimewatch theme tune

Kate Humble:

Hello and welcome to Crimewatch. I'm Kate Humble, and with me is Chief Superintendent Beastlie.

Beastlie:

Evening all.

Kate Humble:

You've joined us at an exciting time - if we look from our position here, on the moral high ground, we can see there's something interesting just emerging from the grass - I can't quite make it out...

Beastlie:

Yes, it's the address where Ben Mitchell is currently lying low. Quite soft grass there - it didn't take much.

Kate Humble:

Look at the little creature, gently whimpering now, with that distinctive black and blue colouration around his pretty eyes...

Beastlie:

...and fingernails.

Kate Humble:

Good. I understand there's also excitement over at the river?

Beastlie:

That's right - the bank has been held up - by a crude collection of twigs and leaves. We would be very interested in talking to a gang of beavers who were seen building a dam in the area. We will also be setting up a hive.

Kate Humble:

For a sting operation?

Beastlie:

Honey trap.

Kate Humble:

Now I've been down by the babbling Brooks - and it's really quite stunning the muck and bilge which has been thrown up.

Beastlie:

Yes - she's singing like a canary. We'll be setting up an observation hide and see what develops - but we are expecting lots of weaselling, hatching of plots and possibly some long distance flight.

Kate Humble:

What a magnificent tit. Please don't have nightmares - Bill Oddie won't.

Self critique:
- not really a top story of the week
- this is still a first draft
- three key gags are completely different threads - fictional person, whimsy, real person, - should pick a theme and stick to it
- the "grass" gag is ok but the Ben Mitchell follow up is poor. Could I not think of a better one? (no)
- Good first line. Goes downhill from there
- probably been too many "-Watch" spoofs this series
- what's the Bill Oddie thing? Was there originally a gag in there about him being a missing person which didn't quite work so you took it out but still had the reference in at the end looking a wee bit, well, odd-y?

Right - back to work. These humanity threatening flesh eating viruses won't neutralise themselves, you know.

I can't really argue with your self-critique, it felt a bit directionless and lacked focus, and I have to admit, the Ben Mitchell thing and the grass confused me at first. Maybe that's me being dense (after a big lunch and sitting in the sun in the park)? You could definitely have knocked it into shape after a couple of rewrites I'm sure, but I'm glad to know that I'll be safe from flesh-eating viruses until at least October...

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