Hey all,
I have required some feedback from here before and found it to be really useful, since then I have 3 new short sketch scenes and would very much appreciate any constructive feedback.
Bouncer Dad Sketch http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_d4YX0XpwVg
Bouncer Dad 2 Sketch http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4d_Zsy4Yj7k
The Model Scout http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6y7y3AUzQYc
Thank you very much
Christian
I'd say that the model one would have to be a fraction of the length. About 5 seconds in I thought, "this is very badly blocked", and it didn't take much longer to work out why and predict the punchline.
The idea of a dad living out his security professional dreams on his daughter is decent enough, but for me it went on a long time without any development. How long to hold your joke, as it were, is a matter of taste, probably.