Comedy Script

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I read the first page.

Sorry not onto a winner for me. A narrative that describes exactly what happens followed by fairly crude characters, doing crude stuff.

Thanks for your opinion - would like to say that the narrative becomes clear on the 3rd page revealing that it's the family dog talking.

Not especially.

The characters were too one note, I may have a bit of a look later.

I was surprised by how quickly your script managed to alienate me.

The sign on the door and the phrase "backs against the wall" (and general tone of the voiceover writing) just felt really played out and wrong rather than funny.

I'm not sure this was written with someone in me in mind, but I wish you every success with it nonetheless.