I have just written a three minute concluding scene fo my eight minute sitcom. I would love if someone would read it and give me some feedback.
I posted the first scene on here a little while ago. If you need to read it - this is the link: https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/23618#P844211
Please let me know what you think. 
Scene Two
(The same apartment - in the early hours of the following morning. Xander enters with Lucy in tow.)
Xander: Shh... Shh... Come in quickly.
Lucy: What's going on?
Xander: Shh.
Lucy: I got a text from Lily - she said that you'd overdosed!
Xander: I can explain everything.
Lucy: Why call me at this hour of the morning - why not an ambulance? What have you taken?
Xander: I am not under the influence of drugs.
Lucy: That remains to be seen.
Xander: I sent the text, not Lily. I needed to get you here urgently.
Lucy: You're insane.
Xander: Oh, why does everyone have to jump to the 'I' word with me? Why not, "Xander, what
a great idea", or "Xander, you always think outside the square."? Why the 'I' word?
Lucy: I guess people just go for the most logical conclusion.
Xander: Look, I'll make you a drink, I think you're going to need a drink...
Lucy: Xander, I don't want a drink! It's one-thirty in the morning - what am I doing here?
Xander: Lily's brought someone home.
Lucy: Well as surprising as that is for someone with the charm and charisma of sociapathic turnip -
I don't see why you'd be calling me.
Xander: It's who she brought home, Lucy, who! You had to see it with your own eyes.
Lucy: Who?
Xander: You won't believe me, come look
(Xander goes to the entrance to Lily's room.)
Lucy: I'm not walking in on that, no one ever needs to see that!
(Xander goes to Lucy and grabs her by the arm. He drags her after him.)
Xander: You need to see it!
Lucy: Xander...
(He pushes her in to Lily's room. Lucy screams and Xander takes a sip from his glass. Lucy staggers backwards out of the room. She is crying.)
Lucy: Bastard, you're a lieing bastard!
Xander: I'm very sorry sweetheart?
Lucy: How could you do that?
Xander: What, I haven't done anything. I havn't cheated on anyone... you know... tonight...
Lucy: That was humiating.
Xander: Well you wouldn't have believed me, you would have thought I was manipulating you.
(Lily enters. She is wearing a black nightgown with a kimono draped off her shoulders.)
Lily: I knew it - didn't I say that he'd be cheating.
Xander: Shut up, Lily! Go and... untie him.
Lily: Fine, fine... don't get hysterical.
(Lily goes back into her room.)
Xander: Actually, wait a moment, Lily...
(Xander follows Lily off.)
Xander: (From off stage.) You little prick!
(The sound of a punch.)
Other Male Voice: (From off.) Ow, shit!
Xander: (Off.) You'd cheat on my niece with that?
Lily: (Off.) You married me!
(Xander walks back in, nursing his sore fist in with the other hand. He is calling back into the room.)
Xander: Don't remind me! I hit him for you, Lucy... that's my good uncle instinct.
(Lucy does not look at him. She is still crying.)
Xander: I was trying to do you a favour, you know...
(Lily enters.)
Lily: You with the waterworks. This idiot in here wants to talk to you.
Lucy: I don't want to talk to him, I don't want to see him.
Xander: Get him out of here - and not this way.
Lily: The only other way is the window.
Xander: then throw the little shit out of it.
Lily: You know, Lucy, I tried to tell you about him...
Xander: Piss off, Lily!
Lucy: And tell him I quit.
(Lily shoots Xander a look, and goes back into her room.)
Xander: That's wise, Lucy darling... and I feel awful about saying it... but you know you have a
job to come to.
Lucy: I don't know about that, Xander.
Xander: Come on, dear, you've seen the budget I've got. I always thought you liked me.
Lucy: I do, Xander.
Xander: Remember those boring family things, when you were little? You thought I was the fun
uncle. Lucy, dear, I was the 'funcle'.
Lucy: (laughs slightly) You're very immature.
Xander: Yes.
Lucy: I don't want to fight with you and Lily all of the time.
Xander: We'll be good - I promise. I'll keep her under control and... feed her and everything.
(Lily wanders in behind them with an empty glass.)
Lucy: Well... when do you want me to start?
Xander: Straight away, dear.
Lily: Oh good.... (holding her glass out to Lucy). Do you know how to make a Gin and Tonic?
(Fade.)
