http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lky-AK1oaEw
please comment, thanks
New Short Comedy Film
You've wrongly spelled Association on the title screen, which you might want to fix, as it could discourage people from watching.
If something's going to be that long, more needs to happen.
It could cut to 5 mins easily.
You need to a bit more severe in the editing room if you want this to have any impact.
I find the African girl a little cliched, but Dave himself could be good.
Good luck.