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Angelos Epithemiou on Deal Or No Deal.

INT. SCENE 1. DEAL OR NO DEAL STUDIO. ANGELOS IS SITTING IN THE CHAIR. NOEL APPROACHES.
NOEL Angelos Neil Epithemiou, a former burger van owner.
ANGEOLOS Yeah.
NOEL PICKS UP A PHOTOGRAPH AND HOLDS IT TO THE CAMERA. 'PHOTO OF ANGELOS IN HIS BURGER VAN'
NOEL You won an award for mobile caterer of the year and there you are in your burger van
ANGELOS Yeah, happier times Noel, happier times.
NOEL Did you enjoy working in the burger van?
ANGELOS Not really.
NOEL, MOVING SWIFTLY ON, PICKS UP ANOTHER PHOTOGRAPH. 'ANGELOS AND HIS BROTHER AGATHEUS'
NOEL Who's the man in this photo?
ANGELOS That's my brother Agatheus.
NOEL What does he do?
ANGELOS Nothing.
NOEL Nothing?
ANGELOS Well he's a bomber Noel.
NOEL A bummer?
ANGELOS (TAKEN ABACK)
Not a bummer no, a bomber!
NOEL
Oh a bomber?
ANGELOS Yeah.
NOEL Not a bummer?
ANGELOS No, there's nothing like that in the family.
NOEL So you're brother's a bomber, what does he bomb?
ANGELOS Everything, my burger van, he blew that up.
NOEL Really?
ANGELOS Yeah, listen Noel I ain't been funny but can we just get on with it and stop mucking about? I'm here for the money. I need to get out of here, because I've been in that hotel for about two weeks with these people and to be honest I don't know where you've found 'em. Some of 'em ain't all there up here...
ANGELOS TAPS HIS HEAD ANGELOS(CONT'D)
I just want to get me money, go home and watch Eastenders.
NOEL Okay Angelos if that's what you want, can I just confirm that you chose box number 6 at random and all the boxes are sealed by our independent adjudicator who is the only person who knows where the money is?
ANGELOS (SHAKING HIS HEAD)
Yeah, yeah, yeah. NOEL
Right Angelos away you go, first box please. ANGELOS
(STANDING UP) Right let's crack on, Shirley box number three.
NOEL Why number three?
ANGELOS I just don't like the look of her.
NOEL
Who Shirley?
ANGELOS
Yeah, Shirley, you should see the state she gets in at the bar. Every night she's at it, and singing on that karaoke, throwing herself at men, rough Noel that's she is, Rough.
NOEL (SHOCKED)
Shirley open box number three please. SHIRLEY OPENS THE BOX TO REVEAL THE 1P
NOEL It's the 1p Angelos, you know what that means?
ANGEOLS What?
NOEL The kiss.
ANGELOS Excuse me?
NOEL You've got to kiss Shirley.
ANGELOS Err I'm sorry?
NOEL The rule of the game is when the penny is revealed the player has to kiss the person who revealed it.
ANGELOS No!
NOEL No?
ANGELOS Nah! I ain't kissing that.
NOEL But it's a tradition of the show.
ANGELOS I don't know what filth you've been getting up to in the other shows but I ain't getting involved in it. If I wanted to go about kissing people I'd wait 'til I get me money and go out and pay for it Noel okay.
NOEL (DEFEATED)
Right Angelos, your second box please.
ANGELOS Eddie box number eight.
NOEL Any particular reason for box number eight?
ANGELOS LOOKS AT HIS WATCH. ANGELOS
No!
NOEL
(GIVING UP) Eddie, open the box please.
EDDIE OPENS THE BOX TO REVEAL 250,000. AUDIENCE GROANS.
ANGELOS (ROLLS HIS EYES)
Well that's buggered it up ain't it! NOEL
(No that's fine Angelos, you still have four of the power five on the board, let's stay positive. Which box would you like to open next Angelos?
ANGELOS (TOUCHES HIS OWN BOX)
This one! NOEL
You can't open that one Angelos, that's your box, that doesn't get opened until the end.
ANGELOS No open it now, I just wanna get out of here.
NOEL But...
ANGELOS Noel just stop messing about and get it open!
NOEL (SIGHS)
Fine, for the first time in the history of deal, we're going to open the player's box in the first round.
NOEL PULLS THE SEAL. NOEL(CONT'D)
Angelos Neil Epithemiou at the start of the game this is what you brought to the table.
NOEL OPENS THE BOX TO REVEAL £10.
NOEL(CONT'D) Ten pounds!
ANGELOS (UNIMPRESSED)
A tenner, ten pounds, I've been here for two weeks, sharing a hotel with idiots, coming in here everyday watching you muck about for ten pounds? Keep it, I'm going!
ANGELOS GRABS HIS ORANGE BAG. NOEL
Angelos! ANGELOS
(WALKING AWAY) No, shove it!
ANGELOS LEAVES THE STUDIO.

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I was convinced his axiety about getting it over with was gonna be beacuse his brother had set a time bomb but, nothing happens at all. You need more comedy in a comedy script or for some reason it just doesn't work.
The basic idea is good - I love parody - but make it funny.

Good luck

That's a good effort Ronnie. Pretty accurate character parody as well as a neat satirical barb at the sentimental luvvie duvvie format that is a regular (and somewhat irritating) feature of Deal Or Noel Deal.

Have a nice shiny star for your workbook laddie.