British Comedy Guide

Guns

Now that I wrote it, somebody else might have done this before though...

Guns

A SOLDIER is in a BATTLEFIELD, firing his gun at the enemy.

The SOLDIER then looks through his binoculars. He sees an enemy soldier covered with green splodges of paint.

Puzzled, SOLDER takes his gun's cartridge out and forces out the ammunition from the cartridge. They are all green.

SOLDIER
Paintballs?! Where are the real bullets?

Cue to a PAINTBALL FIELD. There are a bunch of dead people in paintball armor lying on the ground, with real bullet wounds.

There are two corporate executives looking from a distance, in shock.

EXECUTIVE 1
This was your idea of a "team building exercise"?

EXECUTIVE 2
I didn't know!

Very dark humour - I'm guessing it could be for inclusion in some kind of sketch show? I think another way of doing it would be to show a group of executives all enthused, as the instructor finishes his talk. They all run off and we hear the hail of gunfire and the instructor looks aghast.

Please read any of my posts and let me know what you think. :)

Liked it. I disagree with the previous poster - It's not that dark and I like your ending (though I think it'd be better without Executive 2's line).

Prefer it if you used the proper scene headings (EXT. BATTLEFIELD - NIGHT and EXT. FOREST - DAY). I think the executives should be close to the dead bodies rather than being in the distance and you misspelled 'soldier' (once) and 'cut'.

Otherwise good.

Agree it doesn't need the Executive 2 line. In fact it doesn't need any line there, as suggested - just the instructor looking aghast would be funny

Nice little sketch Thomas. :D

Yeah. good one.
Just the instructors recoiled in horror would be sufficient, I reckon. As long as its made clear that this is a paintballing site we are looking at now.

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