Jokes

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Hi!

I did laugh at some of your jokes. I thought the fiction writer joke made sense and worked. Treadmill joke is kind of a non-joke... it's not really funny because it's not set up to be. Boy who cried wolf gag... I don't imagine going down too well.

'I'd never understood why people read romance novels until I picked one up the other day. Get past the first chapter and it's pure filth.' I don't know if that works any better than yours... But different.

Are some of them supposed to be intentionally 'stupid'?

For example the 'caveman' joke. Obviously cavemen survived in the widerness...

So some of them confused me, but I think there's a good chance its because I'm not hearing them delivered.

Keep posting jokes, for sure!

Hey Scartledge!

Thanks for the help. I'm glad there was a response so quickly.

It's kind of hard for me get outside of my own head, and what I thought were good jokes seem otherwise when I hear how other people interpret it (e.g the treadmill, boy who cried "wolf," cavemen and romance novel joke).

Like your twist on the romance novel joke too!

Quote: Joseph Dao @ December 18 2011, 4:22 PM GMT

I'm a writer. I write for a living. During my time off, I can often be found at my day job serving coffee.

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This is a good joke, but it was a bit too long, I thought. I've edited it down.

Thanks Gerry. That was actually my favourite out of the bunch, and I like your edit better. I already have some related jokes, but I think I'm going to try and expand upon that line even more.

They're not bad but mostly still a little long and have too many words.

I'm a writer, good thing I have a profitable hobby as a waiter.

I bought a fur coat, don't hate me. My dogs been orphaned and I want to be his friend.

My dad says it never pays to lie. He should know, he's a failed writer.

Quote: sootyj @ December 21 2011, 10:09 AM GMT

They're not bad but mostly still a little long and have too many words.

I'm a writer, good thing I have a profitable hobby as a waiter.

I bought a fur coat, don't hate me. My dogs been orphaned and I want to be his friend.

My dad says it never pays to lie. He should know, he's a failed writer.

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Sootyj is spot on, they are too wordy and the crux of the jokes is obscured by too much "flim flam".

Remember with jokes, anything which doesn't add to the joke ends up subtracting from it, so get rid of any unnecessary words.

Also, would you really say "I purchased a fur coat"? It sounds too flowery to me, very few people would speak like that. The jokes need to sound natural, so as Sootyj has done, best change that to "I bought a fur coat".

Couple of other tips, don't repeat any important words in the set up which are crucial to the punchline and try to make the crucial words of the punchline the very last words of the joke.

Good luck and keep writing.

Praise from the master?

I feel like Luke Skywalker when Darth Vader complimented his homemade light saber!

nb another couple of tips.

1 End on the last word of the punchline
2 As much as possible make it a surprise and diferentiate it from the lead.

eg my dogs got no nose
how does he smell?
disgusting!

All the humour lies in the rapid unexpected change from "ability to smell" to "smell as odour"

Thanks Tony and SootyJ. This helps a lot.

I liked the dog one, but it felt like the start of something, then it stopped! You've got some good ideas in there, I think you either need to sharpen them up so they stand as themselves, or enlarge on a theme.

I liked the tree house line.

But the fur coat one is shit, no one but arseholes wear fur, I doubt any billionnaire 's daughters will be attending any gig and beside, just because its fur doesn't mean your dog will well........

I actually thought the rest of them sucked (Royal) too, apart from the tree house one, which was really clever, IMHO