British Comedy Guide

Grandma's Dead (Cofilmic reject)

GRANDMA'S DEAD

INT. OFFICE

DERRICK IS BUSY WORKING AT HIS DESK, WHEN HIS FLUSTERED BEST FRIEND SUDDENLY ENTERS.

JAMIE:
Ah, there you are - I've been trying to get hold of you all afternoon!

DERRICK:
What's going on?

JAMIE:
I'm afraid I've got some bad news...about your grandmother.

DERRICK:
Oh God!

JAMIE:
She's passed away.

DERRICK:
No...oh God no! (PAUSE) Wait - which one?

JAMIE:
Paternal.

DERRICK:
Oh, I thought you meant that ...GRAN was dead! (LAUGHS) You almost have me grieving there for a second!

So out of order it did make me laugh

Could be hilarious! I think after "Wait, which one?" You should rewrite the ending.

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