I made this with some friends last year.
Her's the link..... http://youtu.be/5Yr1qyKKhsw
Check out this little comedy I made
it's well directed and produced...you've obviously put a lot of time into it, so props for that.
otherwise it isn't my cup of tea, the whole being "gay" isn't a punchline in 2011...and you need a lot more work on the dialogue as a bad script is a bad script no matter how well you can produce it (and you did make it look good).
how long did this all take to put together? looks like you've done it at uni so had access to a lot of people/resource.
thanks for sharing.