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You'd butter believe it

A man is walking down the high street when he sees a face from the past.

The man walking toward him gives the same reaction

"Tommy, Thomas Palmer, it's been what? How the hell are you?"

"Billy Kelly, I have seen you since school, what was it they called you?"

"Billy Liar"

"Well how are things going?"

"Fan f**king tastic!"

Thomas Palmer walks away shaking his head saying:

"Billy f**king liar"

Billy walks into a massive jewellers shop shaking his head

A fantastic looking blonde who is behind the counter sees this and speaks in a French accent.
"What is it darling?"

Billy is still shaking his head as he replies
"I just can't remember some old friends nick name"

Blonde
"Never mind darling, you're the owner, why don't you give us both the day off and we can go on your yacht, and you can try and remember the silly old friends nick name eh"

As the two head off out the jewellers the manger bows and opens the doors for them, there is a chauffer driven Rolls Royce waiting for them.

The sun is falling on the horizon, clouds of shimmering heat rises up from the sea, we see the silhouette of a massive yacht.

It zooms in

Billy is pacing the deck racking his brains.

The blonde comes out onto the deck dressed as French Maid with Suspenders and a feather duster. She puts a finger to her mouth and pouts as she speaks.

"I ope sir isn't angray, with Naughty Nicole, but I fink I broke something in ze master bedroom"

The two go below deck cuddling.

It zooms out

The sun is falling on the horizon, clouds of shimmering heat rises up from the sea, we see the silhouette of a massive yacht.

A mans voice booms out in victory.
"That's it 'Doubting Thomas'! that's what we called him at school!

waahey :)

This is funny. I reckon the sketch would have the same, if not better, impact in half the time.

Im no disciple of all this 'cut down to sketch to two seconds' talk, but for some material this works. For example...

*Guy bumps into another guy
*Hey, Billy, not seen you seen since school.
*Hi Tommy, good to see you.
*Good to see you too, remember what we used to call
you at school "Billy Liar", haha, no hard feelings eh?
*No.
*Still a millionaire yacht owner, dating models?
*Yeah
Tommy laughs, shakes his head.
*Classic. Good stuff. See you later.
-LATER
We see Billy on a yacht, surrounded by the trappings of wealth. His scantily clad sexpot girlfriend enters with a glass of champagne.
*You okay Billy, you seem preoccupied.
*I bumped into a school mate earlier, been trying to remember the nickname we had for him...
*Nevermind, have some champagne.
Sips from glass, has a eureka moment.
*DOUBTING THOMAS! That's it!

This is not me trying to disregard your work, far from it, its just that writers love using lots of words, and using lots of words doesn't always help a joke, half the SNL sketches are crisp punchlines buried in layers of contrived set ups.

That all said, I liked your sketch and the situation.

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