Quote: RedZed333 @ July 17 2011, 1:45 PM BSTChic Murrayesque...
Yeah deffo, but my mind goes to the spoof private eye movies first like that Steve Martin one Dead Men Don't Wear Plaid is it?
"I was just thinking of people with beards who died quite early"
Quote: Leevil @ July 17 2011, 1:41 PM BSTNo, it like the Marx brothers or something?
Well, I think WA was heavily influenced by Groucho, so it's probably one of the two. I would like to see James Cotter tackling the role of Harpo Marx in a Marx Brother biography though.
This is palatable but it's not very funny or engaging.
The previous episode was funnier.
For this kind of monologue to work he has to keep revealing stuff to us stuff about himself. That we get and he doesn't.
Drop the background effects down in the mix. They are way to overbearing. You want it to sound like traffic outside the window, not like he's doing radio show sat on the A55 roundabout.
The delivery is very flat, there are some good bits in there John Lennon thing built up nicely. But I was kinda wondering where it was going, for me there was no clear narrative through the piece. Maybe write something short snappy with same character? a prequel to this? his initially reaction being full of bile and anger for losing his slot? Character isn't a monster and he needs to be, at the moment he's just some douche.
You want Black Adder the radio Years, something like that is where I can see it working. But at the moment a bit ploddy a little joke lite.
Needs minor tweaks could be great.
Quote: Gavin @ July 17 2011, 4:58 PM BSTDrop the background effects down in the mix. They are way to overbearing. You want it to sound like traffic outside the window, not like he's doing radio show sat on the A55 roundabout.
In the third episode the sound effects have been lowered.
Quote: sootyj @ July 17 2011, 3:56 PM BSTThis is palatable but it's not very funny or engaging.
The previous episode was funnier.
For this kind of monologue to work he has to keep revealing stuff to us stuff about himself. That we get and he doesn't.
I feel more of a story is starting to build with the character and he is developing. I don't think anything that I do is quite the BCG taste a lot of you (not all) are sketches writers and joke writers which isn't what I do.
How long does it take to produce these?
Quote: Gavin @ July 17 2011, 6:11 PM BSTHow long does it take to produce these?
What writing, recording and editing? Or just the editing?
Quote: James Cotter @ July 17 2011, 6:23 PM BSTWhat writing, recording and editing? Or just the editing?
After you get the script to uploading it to you tube. So performance and editing.
Quote: Gavin @ July 17 2011, 6:31 PM BSTAfter you get the script to uploading it to you tube. So performance and editing.
Not too long a couple of day to actually record and edit. Not including read-through's and rehearsals of it.
Quote: James Cotter @ July 17 2011, 6:39 PM BSTNot too long a couple of day to actually record and edit. Not including read-through's and rehearsals of it.
Ok. On average how many takes do you have? 3-4? Just curious. So you're looking about a weeks worth of work? start to finish?
Quote: James Cotter @ July 17 2011, 6:02 PM BSTI feel more of a story is starting to build with the character and he is developing. I don't think anything that I do is quite the BCG taste a lot of you (not all) are sketches writers and joke writers which isn't what I do.
Telling people that they don't get your type of humour is very poor form, James. Yeah, I write the odd sketch and the odd sitcom, but I also spend a lot of time as a reader/listener/viewer of genres other than comedy. Just because I don't write them doesn't mean I can't 'get' them. It's a ludicrous defence, James. Absolutely bloody minded lunacy.
Quote: Ben @ July 17 2011, 6:45 PM BSTTelling people that they don't get your type of humour is very poor form, James. Yeah, I write the odd sketch and the odd sitcom, but I also spend a lot of time as a reader/listener/viewer of genres other than comedy. Just because I don't write them doesn't mean I can't 'get' them. It's a ludicrous defence, James. Absolutely bloody minded lunacy.
Mmmm. Ben I think that's a bit harsh mate.
Quote: James Cotter @ July 17 2011, 6:02 PM BSTIn the third episode the sound effects have been lowered.
I feel more of a story is starting to build with the character and he is developing. I don't think anything that I do is quite the BCG taste a lot of you (not all) are sketches writers and joke writers which isn't what I do.
James as I always say your friend is the guy who'll tell you when you leave the toilet with your cock hanging out.
We're your friends.
And on this episode your cock is hanging out.
The previous episode lacked narrative but in my view had some excelent jokes from character.
So if you think we don't get your humour.
Fine but joe public and most producers will be even less discerning.
Quote: Ben @ July 17 2011, 6:45 PM BSTTelling people that they don't get your type of humour is very poor form, James. Yeah, I write the odd sketch and the odd sitcom, but I also spend a lot of time as a reader/listener/viewer of genres other than comedy. Just because I don't write them doesn't mean I can't 'get' them. It's a ludicrous defence, James. Absolutely bloody minded lunacy.
I'm not using it as a defence to people who haven't liked it more to the people who have said that this type of comedy is not something they would usually listen to.
Quote: sootyj @ July 17 2011, 6:50 PM BSTJames as I always say your friend is the guy who'll tell you when you leave the toilet with your cock hanging out.
We're your friends.
And on this episode your cock is hanging out.
The previous episode lacked narrative but in my view had some excelent jokes from character.
So if you think we don't get your humour.
Fine but joe public and most producers will be even less discerning.
Again I'm not on about you not getting the humour just that this type of radio monologue isn't what a few on people on here have admitted to not usually listening to.
Quote: Gavin @ July 17 2011, 6:49 PM BSTMmmm. Ben I think that's a bit harsh mate.
It's not even remotely harsh. He's the one who's just bludgeoned the validity of other's critiques to suit his own standing.