Harry Hill Page 2

Aesop once wrote

An Old Crab said to her son:

"Why do you walk sideways like that, my son? You ought to walk straight."

The Young Crab replied:
"Show me how, dear mother, and I'll follow your example."

The Old Crab tried, but tried in vain, and then saw how foolish she had been to find fault with her child.

Given that I'm an amateur would you please show me something short and funny that you have had produced for mainstream TV or national radio so I can see where I'm going wrong.

As a Scouser would say:

Show me how its done, instead of trying to tell me how to do it!

Everytime I try & offer Critique by copying & pasting one of my sketches I get pilloried, but David get's begged to do it.
Life eh?

For the record I haven't read this due to it's length but I'm about to read your other one.

Like you, Teddy, I'm not trained in the art of comedy writing, I don't know jack shit about arcs, structure, muddles and the like...

But I do know what's funny, to ME...!

As long as you think you're putting out good stuff just carry on regardless, you can only get better...

As far as feedback's concerned, the skill to say something 'is shit' without actually saying 'it's shit' is an art in itself and you'll soon learn to sift the useful from the usefulessnessless...

Confession
I thought it was good I did like it, but it was too long and I should have edited it.
These are points I can work on.

In relation to my rage, all that got me going was that knobhead, chisel chested two stone stand up, coming on here and chatting bubbles like he was Roman F**king Polanski.

Have you seen his act? He does that pile of shite in front of about ten people and then has the cheek to come on here like he's a major TV producer/ script writer/ Director. He's a f**king cheeky twat, I'm waiting for him to throw his Bafta stuff up so I can see how an expert does it.,
The sad thing is that quilt couldn't write funny with a broken pen and he comes on here like he's the f**king Chaucer of Chuckles.

I say what I see, that's how I met Roy Walker,

Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ July 13 2011, 10:53 PM BST

Confession
I thought it was good I did like it, but it was too long and I should have edited it.
These are points I can work on.

In relation to my rage, all that got me going was that knobhead, chisel chested two stone stand up, coming on here and chatting bubbles like he was Roman F**king Polanski.

Have you seen his act? He does that pile of shite in front of about ten people and then has the cheek to come on here like he's a major TV producer/ script writer/ Director. He's a f**king cheeky twat, I'm waiting for him to throw his Bafta stuff up so I can see how an expert does it.,
The sad thing is that quilt couldn't write funny with a broken pen and he comes on here like he's the f**king Chaucer of Chuckles.

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Sorry, I was only trying to help...

Red I have no problem with you what so ever what you said was spot on, as was Sunshine, its just the other supercilious sod that got my gander.
I put it up to be slammed, but not to be lectured at length by a man who is about as funny losing a tenner then getting arrested for murder.

wow, this spiralled

So it should!

Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ July 13 2011, 10:53 PM BST

In relation to my rage, all that got me going was that knobhead, chisel chested two stone stand up, coming on here and chatting bubbles like he was Roman F**king Polanski.

Have you seen his act? He does that pile of shite in front of about ten people and then has the cheek to come on here like he's a major TV producer/ script writer/ Director. He's a f**king cheeky twat, I'm waiting for him to throw his Bafta stuff up so I can see how an expert does it.,
The sad thing is that quilt couldn't write funny with a broken pen and he comes on here like he's the f**king Chaucer of Chuckles.

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Guess I'll leave you to it then. Good luck and that.

No,please don't, put your sample up and show us how its done, I am intrigued as well as aggressive you know.

It's too long.

Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ July 13 2011, 11:01 PM BST

Red I have no problem with you what so ever what you said was spot on, as was Sunshine, its just the other supercilious sod that got my gander.
I put it up to be slammed, but not to be lectured at length by a man who is about as funny losing a tenner then getting arrested for murder.

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Oh, when you said 'The sad thing is that quilt couldn't write funny with a broken pen and he comes on here like he's the f**king Chaucer of Chuckles.' I thought you knew me from somewhere...

Dave's stand up clip is very funny.

You posted something that is 14 minutes long that you actually submitted to Harry Hill. the general consensus is that it's waaaay too long for TV - everyone agrees with this. You should never have sent it - as someone with experience in comedy writing you should have known better.

I have now sat down and read the whole thing (slow night). It's not very good, really, and part of that is actually the length. It retreads old ground and grates very quickly. If it had been submitted in response to a plea for 14 minute pieces, it doesn't have enough meat to be taken on. You haven't captured Harry Hill's onscreen persona for the most part, which doesn't help.