Quote: Leevil @ July 15 2011, 8:42 PM BSTI fear with your bad-habits within production that writing something for you would be a waste of time. I suppose that's a common fear with any writer, not writing for themselves though.
Apart from the baffling 'road' noise, I wouldn't say it's badly produced. Unless, I've mistaken what you were getting at, Amott.
Sorry, I didn't necessarily mean badly produced. There are just a lot of errors in there, that have proven to take away from the "material". Is what I meant, Ricketts.
Oh I see. Well, from errors we can but learn.
You'd of thought so.
My advice would be to cut it down by half to reduce the waffling and get at the meat of the character. Then build towards longer pieces.
I suspect your advice will fall on deaf ears.
How dare you speak such words about our luminary Cotter?!
I very dare (tee hee).
I listened to this again just now.
As the first time that I've tried to listen to either episode my Computer weirdly crashed which can somethimes be annoying.
I think there are some nice bits in the script & I can see where the jokes are. but it seemed a bit like a few ideas stitched onto eachother rather than an organic monologue.
You could have all the good bits in half the time & still made it sound just as structured or free flowing as it was. In my opinion.
In fact as I was listening I thought it would work just as well if not better as a diary.
The voice sounds good most of the time, and your acting is improved but it's still a bit rough around the edges.
I shall now listen to episode 2 again.
Does each ep have a different writer or writers?
What SS said (apart from the computer crashing).
Steve talks a lot of sense here (his wife must be back from her trip : 
)
You work hard James my boy. That's why I like you 
Quote: Steve Sunshine @ July 15 2011, 10:02 PM BSTDoes each ep have a different writer or writers?
Yes. There are three writers who write two episodes each.