I thought it was an ok opening and premise - if a little light on laughs. It starts to fall to bits once the CEO appears and doesn't have a satisfying ending. Also, why does Graham suddenly say his name to the CEO?
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Quote: Ben @ June 19 2011, 8:59 AM BSTAlso, why does Graham suddenly say his name to the CEO?
The boss hesitates with "...." as if he doesn't remember his name.
Quote: Ben @ June 19 2011, 8:59 AM BSTI thought it was an ok opening and premise - if a little light on laughs. It starts to fall to bits once the CEO appears and doesn't have a satisfying ending. Also, why does Graham suddenly say his name to the CEO?
Thanks for the comments Ben, It does appear that most think along the same lines as yourself. I shall take Timbo's advice and come back top this one later.
Quote: Shandonbelle @ June 19 2011, 11:57 AM BSTThe boss hesitates with "...." as if he doesn't remember his name.
This is how I intended it.