The Polar Bears

EXT. THE ARCTIC.

Polar Bear (Dave) just stood (all fours) in Snow, another Polar Bear (Ian) walks up behind him like a human, and kicks him in the ass.

IAN
That's for having sex with my girlfriend!  And now I'm gonna kick your ass... but in a less literal sense!

Ian adopts a fighting pose. Dave gets up.

DAVE
Whoah! Hang on there buddy!  Who's your girlfriend?

IAN
Suzy.

DAVE
Who?

IAN
(sigh)
That girl over there.

Ian points to a group of Polar Bears, they all look the same, except for one with a Pink Bow in it's hair.

DAVE
The one with the Pink Bow in her hair?

IAN
No!!  That's Grahamn!

Grahamn waves back.

GRAHAMN
(Gruff voice)
Hello.

IAN
Suzy's the White one.

Blank look on Dave's face.

IAN (CONT'D)
Now, prepare for a polar ass kicking Dave.

DAVE
I'm not Dave!

IAN
What?

DAVE
Dave's over there.

Dave points to another group of Polar Bears, they all look the same except for one who is smoking a pipe. Now Ian is confused.

IAN
Is he the one smoking a pipe?

DAVE
No, that's Jean Pierre.

JEAN-PIERRE
Bonjour!

DAVE
Dave's the White one.

Blank look from Ian.

IAN
Oh sod this!  We need to get some fricken name tags.

Ian walks off annoyed.  Jean Pierre walks up behind Dave.

JEAN-PIERRE
What did he want Dave?

DAVE
He was upset that I had sex with his girlfriend Suzy.

JEAN-PIERRE
Ah Suzy!  I have had sex with her many times. I like it when she wears her Pink Bow.

Horrified reaction shot of Dave.

That made me laugh.

Nah... didn't find that very amusing.

I liked it, the punch needs a bit more added but its a funny little thing.

Cheers Timbo.

Quote: Lady Laughter @ June 12 2011, 12:16 PM BST

Nah... didn't find that very amusing.

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Fair Enough.

Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ June 12 2011, 12:26 PM BST

I liked it, the punch needs a bit more added but its a funny little thing.

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Thanks, yeah the last line doesn't flow as well as I'd like.

I thought it was good to go. Like the Polar Pierre.

Liked that

I'll add my name to the liked it list.

I liked it! it's hard because you've kinda got to imagine you're watching it,
but yeah it was good!
xxx

There were some excellent exchanges in this. I loved the kicking your ass in the literal sense line and Jean Pierre for the name of a polar bear made me giggle.

I'm not sure if the punch was as strong as some of the lines throughout the sketch but plenty to giggle at here. I definitely liked

Ha! Any plans on animating this ShoePie?

That's really excelent, a surreal who's on first with a neat consistent theme on polr bears all looking alike

just the first line about ass kicking is a bit clumsy

Thanks everyone

Quote: Otterfox @ June 13 2011, 2:29 PM BST

Jean Pierre for the name of a polar bear made me giggle.

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I've only just realised that Jean Pierre the Polar Bear rhymes and that made me giggle.

Quote: Goose24 @ June 14 2011, 1:34 AM BST

Ha! Any plans on animating this ShoePie?

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I wasn't going to as I want to steer away from the ruder stuff, but after the feedback I might now.

Quote: sootyj @ June 14 2011, 6:11 AM BST

That's really excelent, a surreal who's on first with a neat consistent theme on polr bears all looking alike

just the first line about ass kicking is a bit clumsy

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Thanks Chief, aww I like the first line. Will see if I can streamline it maybe. Cheers Soots.

I liked to too. I imagined watching it unfold and that's where the laugh came from.

Yeh I think you can overload gags at time and the kicking ass thing makes it sound like you're going in a diferent direction, in a way that distracts.