Hi all, here's a set that I did recently. Would appreciate advice/hints/tips/general feedback really. It felt as if the gig went fairly well, but I'm always looking to improve so...
Stand up - All tips/advice listened to
It seemed to go rather well. The audience took your cheesy jokes well, which I thought you delivered well. Rohypnol joke needs thinning down and the ending could do with a tweek. I felt the 'pussy' bit was your weakest stuff.
You appeared to spend a lot of time looking to your right. That may have been due to audience layout, but I couldn't tell
Overall, though, I'd say great effort.
Well done.
Black Bird gag - good, but very obvious what's coming.
Liverpool Breakfast - Funny
People trying on your glasses - been done many, many times before, but your pay off is pretty good.
military school/gay - dump it.
Witch girl - got good laughs because you threw yourself into two very poor puns. Okay to do this once in a set though.
Oil painting - good gag, if sick.
Cake/rohypnol - good, solid stuff, but the second half of it goes on too long.
Pussy - not very good, but the payoff works very well. Maybe drastically shorten it.
Overall, I would have enjoyed myself. As a promoter, I would give you an open spot based on the video, but you aren't up to paid gig levels yet.
Do you call yourself The Man In The Bowler Hat as a stage name?
Well, he says 'I've been the man in the bowler hat' as he leaves the stage.
I really liked most of that. The final third seemed to lose momentum a bit, and as said above the pussy stuff wasn't quite as good as the rest, but the punchline was good.
Loved the horses for courses line, and the oil painting. 
Hi thanks,
Yes, I do use the stage name - The Man in the Bowler Hat although I've had so much advice about whether or not it's a good idea that it's untrue, all conflicting of course :-)
The audience was on all three sides of me, with about half of them sitting on the right, hence my delivery to that area.
Will look at changing/throwing the Pussy jokes or at least putting it somewhere else in the set.
Glad you seemed to enjoy the majority of it. :-)
You never said where you are from?
Or that I look like a cross between famous celebrity x and famous serial killer y.
I know what you're thinking...
Turns out that Sean Lock also does a bit on wearing glasses - that I'd never seen before - but that's remarkably similar to mine.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7k6k6HsGlC0
Either everyone for the last 3 months has thought I'm a joke thief or no one has watched Sean Lock's DVD.
Either way, it's annoying as I've now had to axe it from my set.
Certainly not me, an I like Sean Lock.
My new material, includes a gag that starts 'Why did the chicken cross the road ?'
Seriously !! - but I have made it my own.
Nice one. I liked the Pussy/red bull.... took a second for it to it!
Definite potential there I reckons, you've got up there which is half the battle