Back to the drawing board
Data Protection Act
This was just a sketch outlining the stupidity often surrounding the Data Protection Act
In places I found this very funny, especially the part where Tony was failing to keep promises and was on 'clock and half' 
It did meander a bit though and I think it could do with some pruning. Also for me the Patient is uttering too many expletives in response to the doctor which means they lose impact towards the end.
There you go, I'm no expert and what I've said could be wide of the mark, but it did make me laugh and I liked the idea.
I too quite liked the premise and idea and enjoyed the read.
But, I didn't like the constant 'voice' direction.
I feel dialouge should speak for itself and promps on how it's spoken be used sparingly
I agree that that the directions etc are off putting and it could do with a trim.
But as for the expletives they were used to cement the notion that the man had not been asleep for a fortnight.
I'm not a fan of swearing in comedy myself, but I do think certain situations warrant it in order to press home certain points.
'Clever egg' of an idea! Funny and could be funnier. I would have gone with this instead of your sitcom entry. A modern day Jekyll and Mr Hyde comic scenario,e.g. One could be a vicar, the other,a playboy: Mr personality,action-man. the confict of the two personalities, comic situations(trying to win the same woman in their own way, e.g. Clark Kent/Superman.) Maybe they could meet when the character was asleep at the end of each episode...Vicar of Dibley/ Mork and Mindy, sort of thing? Just an idea, I wouldn't worry too much about trying to make a point with your comedy, people prefer to have a laugh first, over being reminded what a ridiculous and unfair world we live in.
Anyway, nice one. Buster Spleen! I nearly pished myself.
Quite liked it, but I think you need to get to the point quicker at the top. The first laugh, for me, was 'we've asked him twice already', which was quite a way in. Relatively consistently funny from then on, so if you could find a way to tighten the early exposition that would be great.
One thing that did niggle - an awful lot of the patient's dialogue was him repeating what he's just been told, with an added 'f*cking' or exclamation mark. This, ironically, became a bit repetitive in itself. I'll agree he needs to react to these new bits of information, but a bit more variation would help.
Could do with a stronger ending... and I'm not sure why you've named it after the Data Protection Act, which seems to be a minor factor to me.