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Cool and trendy is what I'm not, but I loved the mobi-dick at the end! (I thought Moby Dick was a sexually transmitted disease!)

I would avoid any and all of these words like the plague.

You'll only get it wrong, and look a right cock.

Here's an Idea. Write it in English and then get someone to translate it to Youth. I wonder if there's an App? Just in case you are wonderingthat's like an errmmm? Errmm? anyone?

Good Luck with it Steve, I wait with baited (and beer smelling) breath.