Hi everyone.
After some feedback on the last scene, I've expanded to write a bit more on Life Coach Dick Clementine. Here is a small sample of another scene; any feedback as always is really appreciated.
INT - THE RECEPTION AREA OF LIFE COACH DICK CLEMENTINE
A PRETTY RECEPTIONIST AND A DELIVERY MAN IN TIGHT-FITTING SHORTS FLIRT.
DAVE: So maybe I could take you out sometime. My car is a two seater so it doubles as a back seat.
DEBRA: That's so cool!
DICK ENTERS HE LOOKS PISSED.
DICK: What's going on here?!
DAVE: Sorry Mr Clementine, I was dropping off a package.
DICK: Ha! I think not. I've worked with many famous celebrities pets, so I'm rather an expert on animal behaviour. I've been watching the pair of you closely, and all the signs are there.
DEBRA: What signs?!
DICK: Dave here would like to place his package in you.
DEBRA: (Holds up package) But it's a box set from Amazon?
DICK: (Sighs) His male genitals.
DEBRA: (Shocked) You have more than one?!
DICK: And this is why I'm forbidding this budding romance.
DEBRA: (Shocked) You can't forbid who I date, you're not my father!
DICK: of course not, I find you sexually attractive. I could be your step-dad I guess...
DAVE: I'd better go, I've left the van running. Not literally it doesn't have legs!
DAVE LAUGHS, THE OTHERS DON'T. HE EXITS.
DEBRA: (Sulking) You could be nice to Dave, I like him.
DICK; I'm helping you Debra. Do you know who wears shorts to work?
DEBRA; No, who?
DICK: Paedophiles and scouts. Now I'm not saying Dave is a scout but...
THE RECEPTION PHONE RINGS; DEBRA ANSWERS, SHE LOOKS CONFUSED
DEBRA: It's Dave, he's upset. Apparently his van has run away.
ENDS
