Hello to all! I joined a while ago but not sure if I actually said hello at the time, so hello anyway.
A comedy geek, (or so I like to think!), looking for an outlet (as other women of my age don't necessarily want to stand around quoting from Blackadder!). So please be gentle. I will also try to use less exclamation marks and brackets (probably!). (Sorry!) Damn. 
You've committed five bannable offences already, just in the one post.
Mods, kindly send in the Giant Death Robot.
(and welcome (and sorry for the lame joke! (and the exclamation mark! (and that one))))
Welcome, Mousemouse!
Welcome aboard.
'lo !
is this nerd poem not allowed then?
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To read out loud...:
Bang bang splat splat tick tick hash
Caret quote backtick dollar dollar dash
Bang splat equals at dollar underscore
Percent splat bang bang tilde number four
Ampersand bracket bracket dot dot slash
Pipe curly-bracket comma comma comma crash
Hallo.
Hello there.
Good poem Juan.
Quote: EllieJP @ November 2 2010, 12:59 PM BSTHello there.
Good poem Juan.
Yes not bad but The poem reminds me of the children's book The Indian in the Cupboard, which isn't really good or bad I suppose.
I have a hard time grasping the feelings you're trying to portray, though you seemed to have paid quite a bit attention to descriptive detail. Even though the choice of wording is nice (I like "Ampersand bracket bracket ") there's a lot lacking as far as any actual depth. Is this about a young boy, resting after a long day of imaginary games and playing make-believe? Is this talking about a full-grown man who is actually a Native American? I can't really tell from what you've given me.
I believe this piece has potentional, although it needs much clearer descriptions, a lot more depth and just more information for the reader in general. Also, I'm not a fan of the last two lines, as they feel completely out of place and forced comparred to the rest of this piece.
PS Hi Mousemouse - welcome to a mad world
It represents to me, and hopefully encapsualtes to the reader also, a brief, yet tormented, phase of my early teenage years. You know, when one struggles to come to terms with the juxtaposition of childhood and the looming period of adulthood that beckons.
The 'crash' references possibly indicate some kind of breakdown of my childhood? Who knows? All that I can really say is that until the dawn of I.T. in my life, I had been unable to express these feelings in such a lucid way as the poem presents itself now. Words themselves,back then, simply never worked for me- as the expressive building blocks necessary for me to bare my totured soul to the world.
Symbols do.
Will, you are indeed a sensitive intuitiuve soul to have made such subtle observations from my crude assembly of keypad symbols. God bless you.
Hello MouseMouse