Skit comp entry - alternate ending

I posted the original in the Skit Comp, but had an alternate ending, just wondered which was better.

ALTERNATE ENDING

2 ORIENTAL WOMEN ARE WAITING IN THE QUEUE AT PASSPORT CONTROL.

OFFICER: Next!

<THE WOMEN APPROACH THE DESK.>

OFFICER: (CONTD) What is the purpose of your visit, Business or Pleasure?

WOMAN 1: (GIGGLING) Both hopefully.

OFFICER: <OFFICER UNZIPS BAG> And how do you explain these?

<PULLS OUT A HANDFULL OF TABLE TENNIS BALLS>

WOMAN 2: We are National Table Tennis Team.....

OFFICER: I've heard it all now. Ok, come with me and you can prove it.

CUT TO: WOMEN DANCING AWKWARDLY ON A PING PONG TABLE, THEY ARE SURROUNDED BY LEERING IMMIGRATION OFFICERS.

THE WOMEN TURN ROUND TO REVEAL PRINTING ON THEIR T-SHIRTS 'THAI TABLE TENNIS TEAM. LONDON 2012'.

OFFICER WINKS AT WOMAN 1 AND PUTS A POUND COIN IN A PINT GLASS.

OFFICER: Ok, ladies, First to eleven wins.

ORIGINAL

CUT TO: CLOSE UP OF OFFICER, HIS HEAD MOVES CONSTANTLY FROM LEFT TO RIGHT.

FX: TABLE TENNIS BALL.

PULL BACK TO REVEAL MORE OFFICERS, ALL HEADS ARE MOVING IN UNISON.

JUNIOR: Looks like you got it wrong Boss, these girls really can play Ping-Pong.

OFFICER: Yeah... You can give them back their bats now.

I like them both.
But the original was a bit Naughtier.

First one for me. I didn't quite get the ref with the pound in the pint glass in the second one...maybe I need to visit Patpong Road again and brush up on the customs.

1st version was wonderful and that's difficult quality to improve on.

Cheers for the feedback guys. Stevs I'm glad you enjoyed it. Ponderer, the pound in a pint glass is a custom in bars near my office where punters pop a pound inthe glass of the lady they wish to dance for them. I'm never invited to those meetings, but some of my male colleagues are frequent visitors.

I was quite surprised to read that modern table tennis rules are the first to 11. it used to be to 21 in the good old days.

Quote: AngieBaby @ October 19 2010, 1:25 PM BST

I was quite surprised to read that modern table tennis rules are the first to 11. it used to be to 21 in the good old days.

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When table-tennis balls were made in England, the game was 'first to 21' but with the advent of Far Eastern imports, the game became more difficult as the new imported balls were slippery and harder to hit straight.

Hence the rule change.