Ive done a follow up to my first work experience sketch (which didn't actually get that much of a viewing). Have a look on the site
New Work Experience Sketch
Good I would adjust the end though to the two talking to each other whilst Johnny is getting the hammer apart from that was good. The usual high quality I've come to expect from you
Thanks Gav, means a lot. And yeah I'll change Jonny's actions.
Anyone else?
Hi Tom,
I liked it... and the first one too. The set-up/idea isn't original but then I think it's almost impossible these days to come up with something completely fresh. It works though, which is the main thing... and there are some laugh out loud moments in both. They would sit very nicely inside a sketch show, as a continuing thread.
Watch your spelling and punctuation... :-)
I'm off to read some more on your site...
Cheers Darren. Spelling and punctuation? I didn't realise, I'll go through and have a look, thanks for flagging it.
I'd be interested to know what you think about some of my other stuff if you are going to read it. Send me a PM or something if you want.
Sure thing! once I've given them a thorough reading, I'll get back to you. I like what I've seen so far...
With regard to the spelling and punctuation... it's only in a couple of places. Since everything else in your scripts/sketches is in order, I didn't think you'd want to let it go.
No 'course not, thanks for that.
Hi Tom
This one is good, as I mentioned was the previous one. Like the theme and as a recurring sketch would be good.
Be nice to aim for a 'big finish' though. Use the same theme for five sketches and then a bit of a twist on the sketches as the final one. I'm thinking of a six-episode sketch show obviously, but something to think about I reckon.
Dan
Yeah Tom I liked these.
I read them both and I enjoyed No.1 more than two but both were good. I found myself LOL particularly in the first one where Johnny wanted his survey questions covered after the robbery.
Top stuff
Cheers guys, that's very encouraging. Hopefully a few more related scenarios will pop into my head soon.