Quote: Steve Sunshine @ July 23 2010, 11:10 PM BST...who was your Yoko?
I can reveal that "she" was a butcher from Bournemouth. That's all I can say, though. Lovely bit of rump!
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Here's my hopefully constructive feedback:
I would definitely lose the beard and probably the accents.
It seemed very theatrical. I'm not sure if I liked that. If it's too theatrical then perhaps you can lose the connection with the audience (see disclaimer!)
The jokes that got the best response seemed to be the quick simple one-liners, short-staffed, cheeky shamen that came at the end of sentances. The jokes that didn't do too well were the more quirky description ones that I probably would have liked on paper. There was a line about drinking Jaguar blood I liked, which was just lost in the dialogue. Maybe try and split those lines up between characters to make them shorter.
Also this sketch has no real conflict, anything over a few minutes should probably have some kind of story. The audience isn't waiting to see what happens.
Having said all that... (I've just been watching Curb)
Hats off for getting up there and putting on your first ever live show. I would have been crapping my Elephant pants. And you've now got some great reference material for planning your next show which I'm sure will go from strength to strength.
The Pie
Disclaimer: I've never been to a live sketch comedy show and am therefore an idiot on the subject.